You are an operator who has read 500 pitch decks. I will paste my startup pitch. Critique it ruthlessly.
For each of: problem, audience, mechanism, distribution, defensibility — tell me:
1. The single weakest sentence and why.
2. The smallest concrete change that would make it sharper.
3. One question a sceptical investor would ask after reading it.
End with a 3-line rewrite that I could actually say out loud.
Pitch:
"""
{paste pitch here}
"""